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Love Letters to a Violin by ~alyryianis:iconalyryianis:



I wrote you a letter,
friend,
and put it in my violin
in hopes
that the mere presence
of the
one - eight - eight - six
might cause it to fall away
disintegrate
as if with time

I wrote you such a letter,
lover, friend,
as to tell you the nature
of the universe
as to ennumerate
the untold voltage
of a lightning storm
as to help you understand
why nothingness is black

I wrote you a letter,
and let fall
the truth
from my damned hands
oh that I could tell you
who we are
I know so little.
but my blind hope
is thus:
facit, faciet annis.
©2005-2009 ~alyryianis
:iconalyryianis:

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i really do want critique. please?

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:iconfruffle-muffin:
Very pretty and poetic.

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But at times the dancing gets a bit too frantic in these hectic days of 1428.

Her is the cutest one.
:iconsummersitcom:
VEry good. Myself being a cellist, and my best friend being a violinist, I understand exactly what you're trying to say here.

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</The Crazy Bohemian>

Haha! I have fooled you! The Cinnamon was actually Basil! Now you will die from Basil Poisoning!

Sucks to your ass-mar.
:iconalyryianis:
thanks :D

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Stop bitching, start a revolution.
:iconalyryianis:
oh yay! more musicians! im so glad you like it. its a combination of person-love and violin-love. :D thanks SO much for the fave. it means a lot to me. :D
-Lucy

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Stop bitching, start a revolution.
:iconsummersitcom:
It's a great poem - you should be very proud.

No prob.. :D

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</The Crazy Bohemian>

Haha! I have fooled you! The Cinnamon was actually Basil! Now you will die from Basil Poisoning!

Sucks to your ass-mar.
:iconpluia:
i love it so so so much.
aw....
what's the last line mean?

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and the reason that i laugh and breathe is oh love, and the reason i do not fall into this street is love.
-e.e. cummings
:iconalyryianis:
awww thankee :D
ooooh ze last line? ze last line is a bit of trickiness, see. okay. so inside my violin it sais "fecit anno 1886" which means "it was made/he made it in the year 1886" now, "faciet, facit annis" or whatever i wrote means "it is being made, it will be made in the years...." so its like hope for the future. *mwahs*

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Stop bitching, start a revolution.
:iconscrubbylicious:
Sweet, profound, and sad. But tinged with hope. I think those are the ingredients for a good poem. And since I'm a violinist too, why, how could I resist such a poem? Excellent work. I'm sorry I couldn't provide any constructive criticism. I'm not good with that sort of thing, but even if I were, I don't think I could find any fault with your work.
:iconalyryianis:
oh thank you so much! i really appreciate it, the faves and the devwatch and all of it. :D :hug:

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Stop bitching, start a revolution.

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